In class we have been working on ways to make our writing more descriptive. We often discuss ways to “paint a picture” for our reader. Chris van Allsburg was a master at this. Each student agreed that we could imagine the way that his books would look even if he didn’t put pictures in them. As a writing project, each student had to choose an emotion or some sort of feeling. They could choose between feeling angry, sad, hurt, excited, tired, hot, or cold. They then had to write a paragraph describing somebody who felt that way. The tricky part was that they couldn’t use the word that they had chosen anywhere in their writing! Each child drew a picture showing that emotion, typed out their paragraph, and then recorded what they wrote in a VoiceThread. Below are our results. See if you can guess what feeling they wrote about!
*Could you guess the emotion each person was feeling?*
*What adjectives or similes can you think of to help describe an emotion?*
*Has there ever been a time where you’ve felt one of these emotions?*
Dear Mr. Avery,
Alexus’ is hot. Heston’s is angry. It was easy to find out what each person was feeling because of the adjectives and similes that they used.
Sincerely,
Ben W.
Dear Ben W,
That is right can you guess anymore?
How are you enjoying sixth grade? Well have fun!
From your classmate,
😆 🙄
Ashley S.
Dear Mr Avery,
I think Ari’s is tired. I also thought that Amanda’s is scared. They used great details to help me figure out what each person was saying!
From,
Mike
P.S.
Get well soon!
Dear Mr. Avery,
I think you all did a great job. Everyone worked so hard on their emotion writing. One time I was so hungry at a funeral and a wedding I did not eat anything because their food was really bad. That is a time when I was hungry.
From,
Jenna
Dear Mr. Avery,
Everyone did a great job! All of them were fun to watch. I could definitely tell what each person was talking about.
Sincerely,
Trey
Dear Mr. Avery,
The emotion writing was amazing. Keep up all of the good work.
From,
Ariel
Dear Mr. Avery,
Yes, I could guess the emotions everybody was feeling. The first emotion was “hot”. A phrase that helped me guess one was I was as cold as a house where someone forget to close the freezer. A way someone could’ve described cold would be to say I was cold when I was in Maine this past weekend.
Sincerely,
Natalie
@Natalie – You did a great job with your writing and reading Natalie. I can tell that you understand what words would help the reader understand what you were trying to show!
Dear Mr. Avery,
I could tell what the person was feeling from some of the words they were using like sweat or bundled up.
From,
Rebecca A.
@Rebecca – It’s important to use words in what you’re reading to help you understand what the author is trying to convey. I’m glad those words helped you figure out what each person was writing about!
Dear Mr. Avery,
I’m so impressed with how creative your students are. I love the pictures, but loved the video/voice even more. It was great how the word the students were describing appeared near the end. Well done, class!
Sincerely,
Amy (Natalie’s mom)
I’m really glad you enjoyed it! They worked really hard on it and it shows! They did an amazing job.